Today we reviewed what it means to be a "good paragraph". We discussed the elaboration worksheet and reviewed what you read about with the "Show Don't Tell" information.
Next you read a horrible paragraph about a roller coaster. Here it is below:
Roller coasters are really fun. They are usually very tall and go very fast. My favorite roller coaster is the Millennium Force at Cedar Point. It is so scary. I think that is the loudest I have ever screamed in my entire life. When I go back to Cedar Point I will probably ride that ride 10 times in a row. I just hope I don’t throw up.
Taking on the role as editors, you offered ways we could improve this paragraph.
Next you began writing a revised version. Finally I shared a new-improved version. You pointed out many things you liked about it.
Homework
In addition to the Chapter 6/7 Princess Bride questions, you must write a paragraph describing a roller coaster experience. Your paragraph should be at least 250 words. This should be a final draft (you may type it or hand write it).
About Me
- Mrs. Ehle
- I have been teaching English and computers at Shrine Academy for the past 5 years. I am now looking forward to a new adventure as I move to Milwaukee!
